AP Lang — style, syntax and revision
A large part of this exam asks you to choose between versions of a sentence that all say roughly the same thing. These ten questions are that choice, made ten times, each turning on a different property of how English sentences are built.
What a short sentence does when it arrives after three long ones. Which of two facts belongs in the main clause, and why that decision is a claim about what the sentence is about rather than a matter of taste. How to fix a list whose items are not in the same grammatical shape. What a passive construction hides in a report where the missing agent is exactly the thing under discussion. How to get an action back out of a noun and into a verb. When "and" is too weak a joint — and, in the case here, when replacing it with "so" is not vague but flatly backwards, because the relation meant was concession and not cause. What deliberate repetition achieves. How to cut padding without cutting meaning. And what a semicolon does that a full stop would not.
The one worth the longest look is the last. A staff notice reads "Staff may only submit expenses on Fridays", and the office meant that Friday is the one day expenses may be submitted. It does not say that. "Only" restricts whatever follows it, so moving that single word four places produces four different rules — about who may submit, about what may be submitted, about what may be done with expenses, and about when. Three of those are wrong and one is the notice.
The punctuation question describes its options in words rather than printing four near-identical sentences, because options differing only by a mark are treated by the checker behind these materials as four copies of one answer. The rule being tested survives; the visual scan does not.
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- Say what a short sentence does when it follows long ones, and what deliberate repetition achieves
- Decide which of two facts belongs in the main clause, and treat that as a claim about the sentence's subject matter
- Repair a broken parallel list without losing content
- Identify what a passive construction hides, and restore an action that has been trapped in a noun
- Choose a connective that states the relation actually meant, including telling concession from cause
- Cut padding from a sentence without cutting meaning
- Place a restrictive modifier so that it restricts the intended thing, and name the other readings its other positions produce
A staff notice reads: 'Staff may only submit expenses on Fridays.' The office means that Friday is the one day on which expenses may be submitted. Which revision says exactly that?
Sample question
The report on the local dam project reads: 'The engineers surveyed the site for three weeks. They mapped the riverbed and the surrounding topography. They identified the primary fault lines. They failed.' What is the rhetorical effect of the final short sentence?
- It serves to balance the rhythm of the paragraph by matching the length of the preceding sentences.
- It creates a jarring sense of finality that emphasises the unexpected collapse of the project.
- It provides a summary of the previous three sentences to ensure the reader understands the conclusion.
- It functions as a transition to a new paragraph about the financial costs of the failure.
See the answer
It creates a jarring sense of finality that emphasises the unexpected collapse of the project.
The short sentence provides a sudden, abrupt stop that contrasts with the rhythmic build-up of the longer sentences, highlighting the failure. The other options are incorrect because the sentence does not summarise, it is not a transition, and it deliberately breaks the rhythm rather than balancing it.